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MY POETRY (3)

Discussion in 'Art' started by Richy96, Sep 29, 2017.

  1. Richy96

    Richy96 New Member

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    *THE WONDER GIRL*

    So I was in a concert lastweek,
    And what this girl did baffled me.

    The audience was seated with great expectation,
    To watch the girl and her friends in a group presentation.

    5 minutes into the presentation, It was all going fine.
    Little did we know that it would soon get dire.

    Their voices became irksome,
    No longer exciting.
    Their Choruses became worrisome,
    And less interesting.

    Covered in shame, they all left the stage.
    All but the girl, farewell they bade.

    Left alone on the stage, she was courageous.
    She kept singing so bold like a warrior.
    Her friends might have seen her as a traitor,
    But at the end, I'm proud to say she wowed us.

    *The lesson is this:*

    Keep doing what is right even when friends back-off.
    They might think you just wanna make a show-off.

    Never because of that shudder or tremble.
    Cuz you're soon gonna be an enviable example.
     
  2. Ashley O'Neal

    Ashley O'Neal New Member

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    You are a very talented poet. I completely agree with the message you conveyed in that poem. I have made the mistake of backing down from something because everyone else did, and I really regret it. Sometimes I lie awake in bed, thinking of all the things I've missed out on because I was too afraid of being an outsider. Excellent job.
     
  3. MwangiJack

    MwangiJack New Member

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    Quite an awesome piece of poetry you have written. It really gives insight into peer pressure which all the youths pass through.

    Peer pressure is a big issue affecting the teenagers thus its a matter that you be addressed every now and then.If utilized properly it leads to a brilliant outcome or if misused the results are quite disastrous.

    I like the work.Simple yet educative.Artistic works are best suited to address peer relations.
     

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